Character Sheets

Rurikredwolf · Feb 03, 2011 1:14 PM

Mr. John wrote:

I'm not sure if Rurik is around or not but I was wondering if I could use these two new characters.
Name: Marx
Age: 22 years old
Gender: Male
Appearance: A yellow dragon he has green eyes and blue horns. His tal tip is like a lighting bolt.
Personality: Marx is a very quiet dragon he is very protective of his brother Zaph, and is not much of a talker. But he cares for every creature and wants to rid the Dragon Realms of evil. He looks up to and admires, Spyro and all of his friends and loved ones.
Background: Marx is an age old friend of Argil's he Zaph, and Argil grew up together and always stick together. He went to fight a battle with Zaph against Malefor's forces and has not been seen since.
Element: Electricity
Weekness: Being an Electric dragon he is very overwhelmed by opponents who use rock and earth like attacks.
Name: Zaph
Age: 21
Apperance: Black with green eyes, and a long black tail.
Personality: Zaph is a lot like Marx he does not talk much.
Element: Wind
Weekness: He is hotheaded and usually goes into things headfirst without thinking.
Background: He grew up with Marx, and Argil, Marx and his parents were killed by a masked stranger long ago He can be a joker

....need to spruce up the weaknesses imo. And for his powers, which ones do they have? you can't just say 'wind' and prance away.

Re-edit it.

Same goes for you Knightstemplar. That characters looks very, very bland. oh lawdy, he goes enraged when a dragon dies...only a dragon? No one else? You'd think that instead of going enraged because it reminds him of his crew, have him be traumatized by it. PTSD anyway?

Mr. John · Feb 05, 2011 5:46 PM

Okay Rurik I was able to re-edit it.

torok · Feb 12, 2011 4:05 PM

Name: Charis (Means hope in draconic)

Age: 14-30 (Depending on the RP or what age I feel like putting in)

Gender: Female

Powers: Lightfire (Fire mixed with light) Purple lightning, Dry ice and Vine (Comes in the form of a green energy orb, when it hits something large vines appear. Or when it hits someone vines wrap around them. The vines can be with or without thorns. Or she can shoot out 2 thick vines out of her mouth, also can be with or without thorns. The amount of vines she can shoot out of her mouth gets higher as she ages.) She can also heal other creature's wounds because of her light power, but that drains her energy.

Weakness: Because of her light magic she's weak against darkness and dark magic. She's also weak against poison.

Background: She's the fourth purple dragon. The dragon realms have been at war with an evil dragoness named Malefica and her army of demons. When Charis was only an egg her mother died in a battle. During another attack on the city she was born in her father had to escape with her egg, he tried to hide underground, but some demons found him, they attacked him and took Charis' egg. The egg was brought to Malefica and she decided to raise Charis herself. Charis lived with Malefica in a large city. She and Malefica were the only dragons there, the rest of the city was populated by demons. Charis trained long and hard to become a great warrior, just like her adoptive mother wanted. Charis had all of her powers at the age of 13. She also discovered that she could see things in the pool of visions, not only that but she could hear things. It is rare that a dragon can see and hear things in the pool of visions, the hearing was telepathic, and for good reasons too. Her real mother contacted her through the pool and told her the truth about her origin. After many conversations with her mother's spirit and directions on how to find her father who is still alive, Charis decided to go and find her true home and what was left of her family. Malefica knew that Charis had left and sent out demon soldiers to capture her. Charis traveled for several days, while avoiding her demon pursuers, and eventually found the city of which her mother showed her. The city had been hurt by war, but it was still standing. She was invited into the city and treated like royalty upon arriving, because she was the long lost purple dragoness. She was reunited with her father. She then learned about what Malefica and her army was doing all over the realm. She learned about how the demons killed her mother. And she vowed to help her war-torn realm. The attacks on the city from Malefica's army increased, but with Charis now against them the evil army was at a great disadvantage. After years of fighting Malefica's army was weak enough to where her city was vulnerable. An army of many different creatures attacked her city, and Malefica was killed by Charis. Peace was slowly returned to the dragon realm. And Charis lived with her father in the city of her birthplace.

Appearance: Purple dragoness, light purple underbelly, purple eyes, light purple feathery wings, white dagger-like tail blade, 2 large white straight horns on her head, 2 smaller horns on her cheeks.

Personality: Strong willed, she's not afraid to fight, she defends the innocent, she has an average pain tolerance because of all the training she had, She now has a hatred for demons.

Cyndi · Feb 13, 2011 1:54 PM

Name: Evermore (Ever for short)
Age:(Normally 19 but if it exceeds an age limit then she would be 15 or 16)
Gender: Female

Apperance: She has pitch black scales with a silver underbelly with diamond patterns on it. Her horns are cresent shaped, going around her head, which ar coloured silver. Her wing limbs/membranes are black while the skins are silver. At the end of her tail there are various silver spikes sticking out of it, all different sized.
Personality: She is dark and too afraid to get close to others incase they die or betray her. But her persona is kind and caring but she rarely shows it.
Background: She was found as a hatchling hiding in a cave, clutching an amulet. She was raised by a young couple at the time of a war. When she was 16 her adoptive parents were killed in the war and she was caught by the opposing side. She lived out three more years as a slave to an evil dragon king who started the war. The king abused her in ways that gave her many scars and gashes. Then at 19 she killed the king and fled the kingdom, killing whoever got in her way. She is currently living in a small house by herself in the Dragon City.

Powers: She is a Shadow Dragoness but with the power to cast a few spells with dark magic.

Weaknesses: She is weak to ice because she was walking through a blizzard and an ice dragon attacked her, thinking she was evil. The dragon pierced her chest with an icicle, weakening her lungs. Now if another icicle was to pierce her chest she will die instantly.

Mr. John · Feb 13, 2011 2:02 PM

Have not heard back from Rurik we should wait till he posts.

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 2:14 PM

torok wrote:

Name: Charis (Means hope in draconic)
Age: 14-30 (Depending on the RP or what age I feel like putting in)
Gender: Female
Powers: Lightfire (Fire mixed with light) Purple lightning, Dry ice and Vine (Comes in the form of a green energy orb, when it hits something large vines appear. Or when it hits someone vines wrap around them. The vines can be with or without thorns. Or she can shoot out 2 thick vines out of her mouth, also can be with or without thorns. The amount of vines she can shoot out of her mouth gets higher as she ages.) She can also heal other creature's wounds because of her light power, but that drains her energy.
Weakness: Because of her light magic she's weak against darkness and dark magic. She's also weak against poison.
Background: She's the fourth purple dragon. The dragon realms have been at war with an evil dragoness named Malefica and her army of demons. When Charis was only an egg her mother died in a battle. During another attack on the city she was born in her father had to escape with her egg, he tried to hide underground, but some demons found him, they attacked him and took Charis' egg. The egg was brought to Malefica and she decided to raise Charis herself. Charis lived with Malefica in a large city. She and Malefica were the only dragons there, the rest of the city was populated by demons. Charis trained long and hard to become a great warrior, just like her adoptive mother wanted. Charis had all of her powers at the age of 13. She also discovered that she could see things in the pool of visions, not only that but she could hear things. It is rare that a dragon can see and hear things in the pool of visions, the hearing was telepathic, and for good reasons too. Her real mother contacted her through the pool and told her the truth about her origin. After many conversations with her mother's spirit and directions on how to find her father who is still alive, Charis decided to go and find her true home and what was left of her family. Malefica knew that Charis had left and sent out demon soldiers to capture her. Charis traveled for several days, while avoiding her demon pursuers, and eventually found the city of which her mother showed her. The city had been hurt by war, but it was still standing. She was invited into the city and treated like royalty upon arriving, because she was the long lost purple dragoness. She was reunited with her father. She then learned about what Malefica and her army was doing all over the realm. She learned about how the demons killed her mother. And she vowed to help her war-torn realm. The attacks on the city from Malefica's army increased, but with Charis now against them the evil army was at a great disadvantage. After years of fighting Malefica's army was weak enough to where her city was vulnerable. An army of many different creatures attacked her city, and Malefica was killed by Charis. Peace was slowly returned to the dragon realm. And Charis lived with her father in the city of her birthplace.
Appearance: Purple dragoness, light purple underbelly, purple eyes, light purple feathery wings, white dagger-like tail blade, 2 large white straight horns on her head, 2 smaller horns on her cheeks.
Personality: Strong willed, she's not afraid to fight, she defends the innocent, she has an average pain tolerance because of all the training she had, She now has a hatred for demons.

WHAT THE HELL DID I JUST LOOK AT?

Gah....this is just a Spyro clone imo. What the hell is Lightfire? I don't remember seeing that in any Spyro games. The Nature one I will buy, though. It's also nice to see that if she heals, her energy drains.

Even though I came on strong, It does have a bit of potential. You just need to look at the character and make a new cookie cutter shape. It's unoriginal, but it's far more developed than 90% of the characters on here.

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 2:18 PM

Cyndi wrote:

Name: Evermore (Ever for short)
Age:(Normally 19 but if it exceeds an age limit then she would be 15 or 16)
Gender: Female
Apperance: She has pitch black scales with a silver underbelly with diamond patterns on it. Her horns are cresent shaped, going around her head, which ar coloured silver. Her wing limbs/membranes are black while the skins are silver. At the end of her tail there are various silver spikes sticking out of it, all different sized.
Personality: She is dark and too afraid to get close to others incase they die or betray her. But her persona is kind and caring but she rarely shows it.
Background: She was found as a hatchling hiding in a cave, clutching an amulet. She was raised by a young couple at the time of a war. When she was 16 her adoptive parents were killed in the war and she was caught by the opposing side. She lived out three more years as a slave to an evil dragon king who started the war. The king abused her in ways that gave her many scars and gashes. Then at 19 she killed the king and fled the kingdom, killing whoever got in her way. She is currently living in a small house by herself in the Dragon City.

Powers: She is a Shadow Dragoness but with the power to cast a few spells with dark magic.
Weaknesses: She is weak to ice because she was walking through a blizzard and an ice dragon attacked her, thinking she was evil. The dragon pierced her chest with an icicle, weakening her lungs. Now if another icicle was to pierce her chest she will die instantly.

Now this also has a lot of potential. Her background is something I would actually like to see details of. It still needs a bit of work, but I can live with this. Does she have any emotional weaknesses too?

By the lord...accepted. Congratulations, you have made the best character I have seen in a while

ontels · Feb 13, 2011 2:39 PM

Looks like a mary sue in my opinion.

Mr. John · Feb 13, 2011 3:00 PM

Great character. Rurik sorry to bother you hut should I still reedit Marx and Zaph's info or are they okay now.

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 3:18 PM

ontels wrote:

Looks like a mary sue in my opinion.

A lot better than what people post here. Hence why I said it still needs work.

And John, you still need to edit it a bit.

Mr. John · Feb 13, 2011 3:23 PM

Okay thanks I'll get on it soon.

torok · Feb 13, 2011 3:41 PM

Rurikredwolf wrote:

torok wrote:
Name: Charis (Means hope in draconic)
Age: 14-30 (Depending on the RP or what age I feel like putting in)
Gender: Female
Powers: Lightfire (Fire mixed with light) Purple lightning, Dry ice and Vine (Comes in the form of a green energy orb, when it hits something large vines appear. Or when it hits someone vines wrap around them. The vines can be with or without thorns. Or she can shoot out 2 thick vines out of her mouth, also can be with or without thorns. The amount of vines she can shoot out of her mouth gets higher as she ages.) She can also heal other creature's wounds because of her light power, but that drains her energy.
Weakness: Because of her light magic she's weak against darkness and dark magic. She's also weak against poison.
Background: She's the fourth purple dragon. The dragon realms have been at war with an evil dragoness named Malefica and her army of demons. When Charis was only an egg her mother died in a battle. During another attack on the city she was born in her father had to escape with her egg, he tried to hide underground, but some demons found him, they attacked him and took Charis' egg. The egg was brought to Malefica and she decided to raise Charis herself. Charis lived with Malefica in a large city. She and Malefica were the only dragons there, the rest of the city was populated by demons. Charis trained long and hard to become a great warrior, just like her adoptive mother wanted. Charis had all of her powers at the age of 13. She also discovered that she could see things in the pool of visions, not only that but she could hear things. It is rare that a dragon can see and hear things in the pool of visions, the hearing was telepathic, and for good reasons too. Her real mother contacted her through the pool and told her the truth about her origin. After many conversations with her mother's spirit and directions on how to find her father who is still alive, Charis decided to go and find her true home and what was left of her family. Malefica knew that Charis had left and sent out demon soldiers to capture her. Charis traveled for several days, while avoiding her demon pursuers, and eventually found the city of which her mother showed her. The city had been hurt by war, but it was still standing. She was invited into the city and treated like royalty upon arriving, because she was the long lost purple dragoness. She was reunited with her father. She then learned about what Malefica and her army was doing all over the realm. She learned about how the demons killed her mother. And she vowed to help her war-torn realm. The attacks on the city from Malefica's army increased, but with Charis now against them the evil army was at a great disadvantage. After years of fighting Malefica's army was weak enough to where her city was vulnerable. An army of many different creatures attacked her city, and Malefica was killed by Charis. Peace was slowly returned to the dragon realm. And Charis lived with her father in the city of her birthplace.
Appearance: Purple dragoness, light purple underbelly, purple eyes, light purple feathery wings, white dagger-like tail blade, 2 large white straight horns on her head, 2 smaller horns on her cheeks.
Personality: Strong willed, she's not afraid to fight, she defends the innocent, she has an average pain tolerance because of all the training she had, She now has a hatred for demons.
WHAT THE HELL DID I JUST LOOK AT?
Gah....this is just a Spyro clone imo. What the hell is Lightfire? I don't remember seeing that in any Spyro games. The Nature one I will buy, though. It's also nice to see that if she heals, her energy drains.
Even though I came on strong, It does have a bit of potential. You just need to look at the character and make a new cookie cutter shape. It's unoriginal, but it's far more developed than 90% of the characters on here.

Lightfire, a made up element, it doesn't always have to relate to Spyro.

So, may I have the character of not?

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 3:43 PM

Not unless you make some changes. (It's pretty much a copy-paste from LoS Spyro)

torok · Feb 13, 2011 3:48 PM

Rurikredwolf wrote:

Not unless you make some changes. (It's pretty much a copy-paste from LoS Spyro)

What changes should I make?

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 3:53 PM

I can't tell you that.

Just try and be original as possible. Nothing is original, but God...her antagonist is just a female Malefor. Spruce it up to what you think is interesting. Like I said, make a new shape for the cookie.

torok · Feb 13, 2011 4:41 PM

Name: Charis (Means hope in draconic)

Age: 14-30 (Depending on the RP or what age I feel like putting in)

Gender: Female

Powers: Lightfire (Fire mixed with light) Purple lightning, Dry ice and Vine (Comes in the form of a green energy orb, when it hits something large vines appear. Or when it hits someone vines wrap around them. The vines can be with or without thorns. Or she can shoot out 2 thick vines out of her mouth, also can be with or without thorns. The amount of vines she can shoot out of her mouth gets higher as she ages.) She can also heal other creature's wounds because of her light power, but that drains her energy.

Weakness: Because of her light magic she's weak against darkness and dark magic. She's also weak against poison.

Background: She's the fourth purple dragon. The dragon realm has been at war with an army of demons. She was born in a small city. The entire city was filled with feathery winged dragons called Angelic Dragons. While she was just an egg her mother was killed while in battle. Her only family is her father and brother. Charis had all her powers by the age of 13. She trained hard to master her powers and help to defend her city from attack. Her brother betrayed his family and went with the demons out of pride and jealousy. The demons and her brother attacked the city, Charis and her sibling fought. Even though Charis didn't want to fight, she had to to defend herself. Charis killed him. She vowed vengeance on the demons for her brother's death, because it was them that brainwashed him. After months of attacks the demons were eliminated. After Charis turned 14 she decided to leave the city. She was too grieved because of her brother's death to stay. She now travels the dragon realm as a nomad, lending a helping hand to anyone who needs it. She feels she can repay her brother by helping others.

Appearance: Purple dragoness, light purple underbelly, purple eyes, light purple feathery wings, white dagger-like tail blade, 2 large white straight horns on her head, 2 smaller horns on her cheeks.

Personality: Strong willed, she's not afraid to fight, she defends the innocent, she has an average pain tolerance because of all the training she had, She now has a hatred for demons.

Better?

ontels · Feb 13, 2011 4:45 PM

Give her a fixed age, it will make it much easier to track her story or else the toimeline you make for her will be all over the place.

Allso give her one or two elements instead of five.

torok · Feb 13, 2011 5:03 PM

ontels wrote:

Give her a fixed age, it will make it much easier to track her story or else the toimeline you make for her will be all over the place.
Allso give her one or two elements instead of five.

I only gave her 4 elements. I don't consider healing an element.

I'll give her a fixed age in RP's.

Mr. John · Feb 13, 2011 5:41 PM

Okay Rurik was able to redit them hope it is enough this time.

ontels · Feb 13, 2011 7:23 PM

torok wrote:

ontels wrote:
Give her a fixed age, it will make it much easier to track her story or else the toimeline you make for her will be all over the place.
Allso give her one or two elements instead of five.

I only gave her 4 elements. I don't consider healing an element.
I'll give her a fixed age in RP's.

It's still a power thoue and besides I was counting fire and light sepretly.

torok · Feb 13, 2011 8:09 PM

ontels wrote:

torok wrote:
ontels wrote:
Give her a fixed age, it will make it much easier to track her story or else the toimeline you make for her will be all over the place.
Allso give her one or two elements instead of five.

I only gave her 4 elements. I don't consider healing an element.
I'll give her a fixed age in RP's.
It's still a power thoue and besides I was counting fire and light sepretly.

Lightfire is ONE element.

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 8:20 PM

4 is still kind of a lot...you won't be getting into any of mine. 2 at most. It is better, though. I just think that at age 14, kind of a lot...BUT THEN AGAIN, ASH FROM POKEMON HAS BEEN 10 FOR 14 YEARS.

Again, better but...gotta ask...why purple?

Cyndi · Feb 13, 2011 8:56 PM

Rurikredwolf wrote:

4 is still kind of a lot...you won't be getting into any of mine. 2 at most. It is better, though. I just think that at age 14, kind of a lot...BUT THEN AGAIN, ASH FROM POKEMON HAS BEEN 10 FOR 14 YEARS.
Again, better but...gotta ask...why purple?

Ash has been 10 for 14 years? lol.

torok · Feb 13, 2011 9:55 PM

Rurikredwolf wrote:

4 is still kind of a lot...you won't be getting into any of mine. 2 at most. It is better, though. I just think that at age 14, kind of a lot...BUT THEN AGAIN, ASH FROM POKEMON HAS BEEN 10 FOR 14 YEARS.
Again, better but...gotta ask...why purple?

I like four elements better. It is my character.

No I did not copy from Pokemon. 14 was just a random number.

Because I wanted her to be purple.

Rurikredwolf · Feb 13, 2011 10:10 PM

Well, if you want her to have four elements, you cannot get into the advanced RP's.

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