Cynder:My story

cynderfan · Jun 12, 2008 6:42 AM

(Cyndery is telling this story)
Chapter 1
The beginning

It all started bad,Gaul had found me away from the other eggs so he decided to take me--and destroy the rest.
By the time I hatched this is where it began...
Gaul looked down at the new born hatchling all he did was grunt at me for I was colder than that hairy bum would ever be."What do you want?"
I began to hudle up to him,but all he did was push me away.
After a week or so he realised that I was fit for the job-to free the dark master.
Still being weak he began torturing me twisting my bones,streching my limbs.of course after this maddness I was a monster,not being able to control myself I obeyed the git so I set off first for Volteer ,still not being able to control myself I finished off with a gaurdian and a easy fight.
Now sucking the power out of him I said calmly "I now only need 3 of you guardians then it will be over Malefor will be free!"Volteer struggled again and I left him there to die then my next target was Cyril the ice guardian.

LordRattler · Jun 12, 2008 6:45 AM

Good job so far....ya know thats what actually got me into liking cynder...when I found out the things in TEN, I felt so sad for Cynder....

shade105 · Jun 12, 2008 4:01 PM

good... personally i little too quick, but its nice

cynderfan · Jun 13, 2008 7:15 AM

(Cynder is still talking!)

I arrived back to tell Gaul I had captured Voteer
"I drained that Volteers power....see?"I held up a large crystal pumping with energy.
Gaul looked up "Yes very good for your first capture Cynder,yet where did you leave the weakling?"
"I left the ice king the dragon commanding to protect him from any inruders."
For once the thing smiled "Ah v--" before he said another word one of his apes barged in.
"M-Master t-the ice k-king has been destroyed."
"What!"Gaul was furiose.
"How is that even possible?"
"Well the purple dragon hatched and we--"I interuppted the ape and mentioned "Yes while I was coming back I saw the creature running into the cave near the temple.."
Gaul was angry "Grrr then get up and get to the convexity and place in the second crystal so we can find Cyril!"
I flew of speech less.
After I plugged in the crystal I set off to find Cyril.
Soon I found him roaming around a peice of ice and found him.
It wasn't an easy fight.

cynderfan · Jun 14, 2008 2:43 AM

(Cynder is still talking)
Chapter 3
Death
I tried to yell but instead I dived at Cyril.
We both skidded into the water we clawed at each other then seeming Cyril is an ice dragon he managed to splutter ice at my face I quickly turned around,by this time I was suffocating now wanting air I dragged Cyril into the air "Prepare for your death dragon!"I mutterd in his ear,his eyes widened now breathing in I flamed his wings so he couldn't fly I heard his crys of mercy all I did was drop him from a dangerouse height the crys turned into screams of help,he plunged breaking the ice on which he landed he was now drowning so I swooped and picked him up to drain his little power left.
After I got the crystal Gaul came to me.".....Now the hiding spot better be good!" Gaul was stilil angry at me.
I chukled and replied " I ivaided the Atlawa tribe and destryed them I left their god to deal with the dragon but I saw that purple menace again."
Gaul looked up "Ignitus must know we are on the move....I want you to get their guard Terrador the strongest....he is where you make our wepons."I nodded and flew off to Boyzitbig.
I found Terrador destroying Steam's train he didn't notice me.

cynderfan · Jul 01, 2008 9:18 AM

Chapter 4
The 2nd last guardian
A screech of pain fell from me as I fought against the robust dragon,he managed to wound me but I eventually knocked him to the ground,he skidded into a rock then I carried him to the security forcefeild,now trapped I was draining his power.
I left to tell Gaul.
"The crystal will be charged before it blows,both the dragons will die along with anything near the surface."I chuckled with victory-of what I thought was.Gaul threw me a peice of raw meat "Happy?"I caught a glimpse of a smile from the foul creature,I was speechless "Gaul?"Spoke me shakly.
Gaul was staring out the window into the blissful winters night not turning he grunted at me "What is it dragon?"He sounded sad somehow.
"I know something is wrong Gaul tell me."
"You know I never answer your pitiful questions." Gaul stamped out of the room.
What is wrong with him?
I urged to know what happened so I ran out the room to get Gaul (P.S that meat was TERIBBLE!).
I saw him standing there talking to a (Rather scared)ape.
Oh but it was more than talking.

cynderfan · Jul 16, 2008 8:12 AM

Chapter 5
Nourish and Darkness
Once I grew closer,Gaul groaned to me "kill him."
I stared at the ape,it curled up into a ball,inside my head something just urged me to rip it's flesh.
When ever I plant a crystal It got harder and harder for me to resist darkness,raisine my razor sharp tail blade the ape got in an even tighter ball,If you aren't the bloody type I'd say not to read this chapter,Gaul stared at me,he was holding his swords,but not to kill the ape to kill me,now I raised my head,lunging at the ape sooner or later I rose with blood dripping from my mouth,walking up to Gaul I asked "What happened?"
All Gaul said was "To release you."
"WHAT!?THAT APE WANTED ME TO BE RELEASED!"
"Well obviosly.Now Cynder--"
Again interuppted "The dragon is releasing Terrador,please hurry!"
Gaul simply glared at me "Finish off that dragon NOW!"He roared,"I won't fail you,not now."I said boeing
"You better not."Gaul sneered.

cynderfan · Nov 22, 2009 3:13 AM

Chapter 6
Pain
I stared at Gaul, "Why do you hate me?"
"Because your worthless" He snorted loudly.
"What did you just say? , Gaul? Because I could slash off you neck if you threaten me once more!" I screamed, my voice booming off the walls.
"Pfft, you can't harm anything more than a guardian!" He tesed me testily.
Anger boiled in me like a kettle with hot water, and I leapt at him, slashing at his eye with my claws.
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Sorry isn't done yet tongue

cooldude22345 · Nov 22, 2009 3:34 AM

Story seems a bit too rushed. And NEVER put P.S in a nonfiction. It just doesn't seem right, though somebody might disagree with me.

You have a couple of mistakes here and there, like when Cynder found Cyril you wrote, "Soon I found him roaming around a peice of ice and found him.". When I think of a piece of ice, I think about the kind that I put in my soda. Try being a little more descriptive with that, like "Soon I found him flying around a mountain of ice."

Plus, you said that you found him twice. lol. Check out my story sometime, kay?

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