#1 Jun 03, 2009 10:39 AM

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The Legend of Spyro: Getting over her

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#2 Jun 03, 2009 3:40 PM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro: Getting over her

That was a really good story, despite the fact that I will always want Cynder to be with Spyro... You took Cynder's death and turned it into something that bloomed well. my only criticism is the fact that I think that Spyro should be with Cynder and only Cynder, but that's just my personal belief. um this story it well written, and I appreciate the fact that Cynder did play a good role in this... I don't have much else to say except, keep up the good work.


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#3 Jun 03, 2009 3:59 PM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro: Getting over her

Temptation to post critically rising...

Tell you what, I'll post what I liked.

The concept was good, messing with the relationship was a good idea, and killing Cynder so she became an almost spirit character. The introduction was good, it explained a lot, but not in too much detail, always a bonus.

But since I know you're against full on criticism I'll spare you the rest.

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#4 Jun 03, 2009 4:26 PM

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You do have a point Aceedwin.


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#5 Jun 03, 2009 6:37 PM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro: Getting over her

Just tell me what you want to tell Aceedwin...
I said that people could comment what I could do better so COME WITH IT! XD
I promise I will not be mad when I actually ask for it ^^

Oh and thanks my WATCHes on DA love this story too ^^

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#6 Jun 03, 2009 6:47 PM

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It was a really good story and that's that. not much else to tell.


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#7 Jun 03, 2009 8:28 PM

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That's okay ^^ when I ask for it then will I like to have it...
It sounds logily right?

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#8 Jun 03, 2009 9:34 PM

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#9 Jun 04, 2009 6:19 AM

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*cracks knuckles* You asked for it, remember that.

Your language was mediocre at best, with no real writing talent, the way you introduced Lora was too simple and not touched on enough. And I'm sorry, but the hatchling with the blades? Spare me...

Hee hee hee... Feel free to take your revenge on my fan fic.

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#10 Jun 04, 2009 2:50 PM

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First what means "mediocre" ^^"
Okay I didn't expect that you will say that...
And I'm not the revenge kind of guy...

And wtf is there wrong with the hatchling?
Okay even that I promised that I wnot would be angry then do you *bleep*s me off...

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#11 Jun 04, 2009 3:39 PM

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The idea of the hatchling being like Cynder, completely ignoring genetics, that sort of thing. It's all a bit cheesy...

Mediocre = Decent

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#12 Jun 04, 2009 3:57 PM

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Yeah it is a bit rushly written but who cares? (except like a idiot like you)

If I somehow could block you then would I...
will you please NOT comment anymore on my stories if you have to be a jerk like that...

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#13 Jun 04, 2009 4:03 PM

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Heh, remember, I gave you a chance, you told me to say everything. You have absolutely no right to get angry like that. If you didn't want to see a critical opinion, you shouldn't have told me to say it. It's my opinion, I have a right to express it when given permission. Don't try to get the moral high ground on this one.

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#14 Jun 04, 2009 4:16 PM

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I ment what I could have done BETTER and not what you didn't like about it...
And yeah it was stupied of my to ask you and I talked about it with my friends becuase you really hurt me with those words... I'm actually proud of this story... but one of my friends know about you and he also thinks you are a idiort so please leave us poor writters alone >.<

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#15 Jun 04, 2009 4:21 PM

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Birds of a feather flock together. Seems the medievil people had a little bit of intelligence.

I said what I didn't like, I probably could have put what you could have improved, but it was a one-off, so I didn't see the point.

Oh and to your friend. "Your friend isn't a good writer. Would you rather I cut down his hopes now, or an entire crowd does it when he believes himself to be some kind of god."

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#16 Jun 04, 2009 4:26 PM

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It is called 'friends' but maybe are you unfamilier with that...

So I could do that better to my next story or my fanfic...

So? some of us like to write becuase we thinks it is fun...
And it is funny to get comments like those you give us?
NO IT'S NOT so get off your jerk >.<

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#17 Jun 04, 2009 4:35 PM

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Three linked arguments at once? Hmmm...

It's an expression. Know you're trying to label me as a loser, you really aren't good at arguing are you?

Hmm, my advice tends to be based on doing the same story, but the main piece of advice I'd give is be more descriptive. You make your stories so short because you fail to use more advanced language. The sign of a truly talented writer? Using different words for the same thing.

And some of us comment because writing better stories is more than fun. Write a good story and you get a sense of achievement. Write a borish, dull one and it's just there, evidence of your lack of talent, after the fun has gone...

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#18 Jun 04, 2009 4:42 PM

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#19 Jun 04, 2009 4:59 PM

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So it is halfway intelligent, but I can meet you on that field. I know about genes too.

For a start, I was only saying it was cheesy. Now, let's continue from your point of view. For a start, the Spyro world doesn't really have genetics, otherwise the purple egg wouldn't suddenly pop up every ten generations.

Secondly, let us assume what you said is true and Spyro is Bb. For a start, that requires at least one of his parents to be Bb, or more. This is a 25% chance as we can see. The chances are stacked against Spyro's Bb alleles.

Finally, tail blades are a beneficial mutation, meaning that within roughly fifty generations, tail spades would be wiped out. And from the rough amount of time guardian dragons have been around it seems fair to say that the allele would most likely dominate.


Well, that's enough from me. You obviously don't want my points, so I won't post any more comments. What I don't quite get is why you didn't do that in the first place. I mean, you had a choice and you allowed this.

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#20 Jun 04, 2009 5:02 PM

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Fine... but first was it my friend and not me there said all that...

Anyway we all don't care about facts so let's now jsut read the *bleep* story!

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#21 Jun 20, 2009 1:54 AM

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#22 Jun 20, 2009 1:56 AM

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#23 Jun 20, 2009 2:01 AM

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#24 Jun 20, 2009 8:02 AM

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Re: The Legend of Spyro: Getting over her

Now see, I was gonna leave this thread alone. But now I've been challenged! I can't back down from that!

Post 1: Ah, it's insulting me! How cute. I'm a critical person. It's not like I've told everyone their stories are rubbish, I liked Nightwing's one. But draggydrakness keeps asking for comments. I give them to him, but I just don't like giving SUGAR-COATTED LIES! (sorry, force of habit)

Post 2- Why don't you read it and find out.

Post 3- But why shouldn't he learn to become one? It'll make his stories better, more enjoyable, and he'll gain a skill, and a sense of achievement. Everybody wins.

Also, use one post for everything. It looks silly doing one for each point.

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#25 Jun 20, 2009 11:34 AM

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