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Re: Razz's Spyro Writing Critique

dummy@example.com (Dragran) — Fri, 29 Feb 2008 07:59:45 +0000

You went on quite a writing spree for Cynder 100, Razz.

I take it that the bits of Cynder 100 story aren't suppose to be Chronological then? I probably should have realized that between part 5 and 6. :-P

You seem to understand the characters pretty well, and I like your take on the unseen sides of Cynder, Gaul, and other characters.

Re: Razz's Spyro Writing Critique

dummy@example.com (Spyrofriend) — Tue, 26 Feb 2008 06:35:42 +0000

Your stories are short, but carry in them enough description to make up for thier brevity. They are very good though Raz. Imo I'm a good enough writer myself to tell when someone is a good writer. it shows in the way the story flows with each word, and you can easily picture yourself there as an onlooker.. That I can d with your stories. Keep up the good work..

Razz's Spyro Writing Critique

dummy@example.com (Razz) — Mon, 25 Feb 2008 01:20:13 +0000

I hope I'm not breaking the rules here. I have this vague recollection that we are allowed to post a thread in which all forum members can talk about our stories in the fanfic section. If this is against forum policy, I will happily delete this thread.

And if it is allowed, well, this is the thread where, as the title implies, all members of the forum can post their thoughts regarding the Spyro fanfics I've written. Constructive criticism is accepted here, but if all you have to say is "I don't like your writing style", please be quiet. I'm trying to improve as a writer, so any advice is greatly appreciated.

Here are the stories thus far:

LoS: A Friend
Spyro makes the first overtures of friendship toward the once-terrible Cynder.
http://razzek.deviantart.com/art/LoS-A-Friend-64594721

LoS: Darkness
A fun theory about the Dark Master I wrote after playing ANB. (Written before TEN was released, so it is very innacurate now.)
http://razzek.deviantart.com/art/LoS-Darkness-64674914

Cynder 100
One hundred short stories detailing the life of Cynder from birth until the end of TEN.
http://www.spyroforum.com/topic-3526-cynder-100.html

Hand of Darkness
The life of Gaul Battleeater and his rise to power among the apes.
http://www.spyroforum.com/topic-3533-ha … kness.html